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Twinkle Twinkle
Little Star
Fall to earth
And heal this scar
Humpty Dumpty
Patch me up
Tell me when I've
Had enough

Jack and Jill
Went up the Hill
And Jack broke
Jill's poor heart
Jack hurt Jill
With each new thrill-
It's not love,
But it's a start

Jack fucked Sally,
Too busy
To care
That Jill
Was still
standing there

It was Jill he forgot
Pulling petals of rot
He loves me.
He loves me not.


Twinkle Twinkle
Little Star
Fall to earth
And heal this scar
Take my love,
Rip him apart-
It's not love,
But it's a start
Sometimes nursery rhymes and fairy tales have a little more to the story than what we're told.

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Mini-MiVi Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006
I love fairy tales that aren't always "The princess was rescued, the prince is an emotionless sob who rarely has more than ten lines in the whole movie." :heart:
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Lerianna Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
lol, I agree! And thank you for the :+fav: :hug:
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Mini-MiVi Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2006
Cinderella made me laugh the most. All the prince said was "PLEASE WAIT" in the whoooole effin' movie. xDDD

It killed me.

You're very welcome. x3
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kay-d Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2006
I love the use of nursery rhymes. I've tried it once - it's a great base for creating something so much bigger than what nursery rhyme says. Or maybe it's another interpretation, I mean, how did Jack fall down in the first place???

Sorry, that's my 'question everything' side coming out. Great piece. Well written, with an intriguing concept. And I liked the subtle rhyme.

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Lerianna Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! And that is just fine. Question everything! I do that too. :)
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lyingthoughtsspiral Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2006
Wow, I sense much anger in this. The concept is really brilliant, and the writing of course!! xx
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Lerianna Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D
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lyingthoughtsspiral Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2006
Your welcome =) xx
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TheBookNerd Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2006
*A tear* Goodness...that was really deep......I almost felt the anger in that poem.....like a stab at the heart....great job....I'm impressed...
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Lerianna Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Good! I'm glad. :hug:
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